Blue
Accident! blood stains on his arms!
Holy cow! he feels so blue!!
Oh dear poor pedestrian!
Hey car driver there, damn you!!
Blue’s what I see everywhere,
The sky is blue, the water is blue
The fiercest of the fire is blue
Blue are the feelings of man
Will the blue always persist?
Yes! in this world full of apathy
While cheer evokes doubts,
The blues invoke empathy
Next day radio aired the accident
Amid all the captivating coverage,
They had a small point to make
It wasn’t the driver’s mistake.
Its not Drivers mistake may be we are living in a world, where we hide our faults over others mistakes. Defenders were human the same race as of Driver but there was no one from Cow’s race to protect her.
Well every poet has his own perception.
@Anonymous: Sure, everyone has his own perception! but I couldn’t understand where exactly we differ.. I wasn’t able to fully understand your comment. Please add some more details if possible.
@Anonymous: reading your comment again, it seems like you thought a “Cow” was hit in the accident! Please tell me that’s not right. If that’s indeed the case, let me clarify that there is no cow in the scene.. another human was hit by the driver. If you are confused by “Holy Cow!” — it’s just my way of expressing astonishment.
Thanks for the clarification. As I said earlier every poet has some imagination in his mind and Poetry is so abstract that every reader perceive it by their imagination.
The reason we differ is the mix of genders in the poem.
Accident! blood stains on “his” arms!
Holy “cow”! “he” feels so blue!!
When u say “his” I perceived it as a man but when u say “cow” it symbolizes me to a female, something gentle full of innocence.
Then there is again a “he” but the “cow” was so captivating for me that I could not relate her with “he and his”. If you would have used “she and her” instead of “he and his” I might have imagined something closer to your imagination.
I agree by referring man as “he” but comparing it with “cow ” is not fitting well. As you need to fit an innocent victim “Cow” is a good metaphor but she is just not fitting well with a man.
I like your poem thats the reason I made the comment. Its ok if readers perceive it differently its not an advertisement. You don’t have to say “Please tell me that’s not right”.
The good thing about poems is that it liberates you to the world of imagination. Poet could be a seed but trees are built by the readers.
@Anonymous: You have made a good point. When we express something and the other person perceives it differently than our original intention, it is considered an indication that there was a disconnect between expression and perception, and something needs to be corrected. But as you said, with poems, this is not necessarily true, and it may be a good thing to have room for an open-interpretation. Thanks for bringing this up.
No problem, Good Writers should be appreciated. By the way what time zone is this?
Why you disabled the comments for your next poem. Sacred from critics ?
No, certainly not
I don’t know how or when did comments get disabled! Fixed it now – look forward to your comments.